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Describe a website you have bought something from. You should say: what the website is what you bought from this website how satisfied you were with what you bought

#website
No doubt, there are so many sophisticated eCommerce websites on the internet, but choosing one of them can be a bit tricky since we would never know if they are really that
much
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reliable or trustworthy except, of course, we are talking about
amazon
.com. Now, I think that there are very few people, using the internet to buy things, who don’t know about the
Amazon
 eCommerce
website
. But, still, to repeat, it is the world’s largest online retailer, manufacturer of electronic book readers and web service provider that has become the iconic example of the electronic commerce industry all over the world. Being founded in the year of 1994,
amazon
.com has actually revolutionized the way business is done on the internet by incorporating the latest technologies on its
website
 to the best possible effects. And I realized
this
, again, when I went to buy an E-book reader from their
website
 about a few months ago for my 14-year-old cousin. By the way, the E-book reader, I bought, is the
Amazon
 Kindle Paperwhite, which probably is the right choice for all kinds of users. And it didn’t even cost me that much money even though
this
 sharp 6-inch device is packed with 8 GB of storage and a 300-PPI backlit display. So, in the end, it was quite a deal for me, as I didn’t have to look anywhere else for what I was exactly looking for. But, the best thing was that it probably took me only about 5 to 7 minutes to finish the whole process of finding my E-book reader and paying for it. Well, what I really liked about
amazon
.com was that the
website
 actually allows its customers to personalize and filter
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product information based on the customers' tastes and preferences.
Besides
, I was very impressed with the way the
website
 managed to organize its navigational features. It was designed and built in
such
 a simplified manner (especially, for
such
 a “gigantic” online retailer) that the customers don’t feel lost when searching for their products.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion to fulfill the structural requirements more distinctly. Although your essay flows well, a more explicit separation could enhance clarity and coherence.
Task Response
Consider adding a short concluding paragraph that summarizes your experience and reflection on using the website, offering a rounded finish to your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use transitional phrases to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will strengthen the cohesion and coherence of your essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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