In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A lot of
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educatinal
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educational
institutions and hospitals are situated in town. Some individuals believe that
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every
people
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should get
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the opportunity
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to
work
in their suitable areas, but others consider fresh
teachers
and
doctors
should participate in
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for some years. In
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essay, I agree with
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view because of
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development. Perhaps, the most compelling reason why better education and medical facilities in undeveloped
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because
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ensure rights among the people. If the
teachers
and
doctors
work
in
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, underprivileged persons will
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to obtain their necessary things.
For example
, they get their proper medicinal treatment and join for education.
Additionally
, they are not only educated but
also
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and free from
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the danger
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of diseases, which
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them to contribute
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economy
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system.
Moreover
, it would be good for
teachers
and
doctors
, who are fresh from university to implication their theoretical knowledge into practical.
On the other hand
, if young
teachers
and
doctors
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their favourable places, they can select highly suitable
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.
As a result
, the underdeveloped portion
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get their desirable things.
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,
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they get
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to
work
in large
town
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, they
are
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not gather much experience, which gives them less motivation. That’s why they are not
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in their job life.
Besides
,
government
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the government
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had bad
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in
this
sector and particularly
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any
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benefit from them. In conclusion, working
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rural
place
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obviously
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a good
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, but the government should ensure their financial, accommodation and mental satisfaction so that every
employees
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go
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to
this
place and
work
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with full energy.
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