In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A lot of
Nations
Change noun form
Nation's
Nations'
educatinal
institutions and hospitals are situated in town. Some individuals believe thatCorrect your spelling
educational
,
every Remove the comma
apply
people
should get Fix the agreement mistake
person
opportunity
to Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
work
in their suitable areas, but others consider fresh teachers
and doctors
should participate in village
for some years. In Add an article
the village
this
essay, I agree with former
view because of Add an article
a former
the former
country’s
development.
Perhaps, the most compelling reason why better education and medical facilities in undeveloped Correct article usage
the country’s
site
because Fix the agreement mistake
sites
of
ensure rights among the people. If the Change preposition
to
teachers
and doctors
work
in countryside
, underprivileged persons will Add an article
the countryside
able
to obtain their necessary things. Add a missing verb
be able
For example
, they get their proper medicinal treatment and join for education. Additionally
, they are not only educated but also
well skilled
and free from Add a hyphen
well-skilled
danger
of diseases, which Add an article
the danger
encourage
them to contribute Correct subject-verb agreement
encourages
in
Change preposition
to
Add an article
the economy
economy
system. Replace the word
economic
Moreover
, it would be good for teachers
and doctors
, who are fresh from university to implication their theoretical knowledge into practical.
On the other hand
, if young teachers
and doctors
choice
their favourable places, they can select highly suitable Replace the word
choose
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
As a result
, the underdeveloped portion don’t
get their desirable things. Change the verb form
doesn’t
Although
,
they get Remove the comma
apply
chance
to Correct article usage
a chance
work
in large town
, they Fix the agreement mistake
towns
are
not gather much experience, which gives them less motivation. That’s why they are not Verb problem
do
success
in their job life. Replace the word
successful
Besides
, government
had bad Add an article
the government
investment
in Fix the agreement mistake
investments
this
sector and particularly get
Wrong verb form
got
any
benefit from them.
In conclusion, working Correct determiner usage
no
on
rural Change preposition
in
place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
obviously
a good Add a missing verb
is obviously
things
, but the government should ensure their financial, accommodation and mental satisfaction so that every Correct the article-noun agreement
thing
employees
Change to a singular noun
employee
go
to Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
this
place and work
with full energy.Correct subject-verb agreement
works
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