The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007
The line chart illustrates the number of foreign visitors to the
coast
, mountains
and lakes
in a country in Europe from the
1987 to 2007.
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Overall
, the coast
stayed as
the most visited place. The numerous of visitors Verb problem
remained
of
the Change preposition
to
mountains
remained stable, however
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however,
a
bunch of tourists, who visited the Correct article usage
the
lakes
increased significatly
, Correct your spelling
significantly
then
dramatically and dropped at the end
of the period.
The coast
stayed
the most popular area among foreigners over the entire time. In 1987, there were twice as many people Verb problem
remained
in
the Change preposition
on
coast
as in the mountains
, at 40 and 20 thousands
, respectively. Change to singular
thousand
This
proportion did not change after two decades in 2007, with just over 70 and around 30 thousands of tourists.
In 1992, the number of people stayed same
for Correct article usage
the same
two
least popular areas, the Correct article usage
the two
mountains
and lakes
. A bunch foreign
people, who visited the Change preposition
of foreign
lakes
increased steadily and then
dramatically until 2002, when it reached its maximum. At the end
of the period, it is noticeable that the numerous of overseas travelers increased in all of three areas.Submitted by dnm.best on
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