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The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.

The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.
The table provides data about the figure of
visitors
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 in the United Kingdom and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.
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, the highest number of
visitors
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 came to the United Kingdom in 2007. As can clearly be seen, the numbers of
visitors
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 in the UK in 2006 and 2007 were pretty similar accounting for 32.713 million and 32.778 million respectively. The lowest number of
visitors
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 came to the United Kingdom in 2003 with 24,715 million. The highest spending was in 2008 with 16.323 billion
pounds
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,
whereas
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, the lowest spending was in the year of 2003 with 11.855 billion
pounds
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. The average spendings per
visit
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 in 2006 and 2007 were quite similar accounting for 486 and 487
pounds
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 respectively. The highest average spending per
visit
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 was in 2008 with 511
pounds
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, meanwhile, the lowest average spending was in 2004 accounting for 466
pounds
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. In 2003 and 2004 the average
nights
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 per
visit
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 was the same accounting for 8.2. In 2007 and 2008 the average
nights
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 per
visit
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 was
also
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 the same at 7.7 In 2005 and 2006 the average
nights
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 per
visit
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 were quite similar accounting for 8.3 and 8.4
nights
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. The highest average
nights
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 per
visit
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 was in 2007 and 2008 at 7,7
nights
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,
while
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, the lowest average
nights
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 per
visit
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 was in 2006 at 8,4
nights
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, pounds, visit, nights with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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