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the table below gives information on consumer spending on differnet items in five different countries in 2002.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on differnet items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given table compares the percentage of spending money on three different categories among five
countries
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.
Overall
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, it is obvious that in all
countries
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 expenditure on
food
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, drinks, and
tobacco
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 was the highest
proportion
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 that people
had
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paid.
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Also
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 the highest
proportion
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 for clothing and footwear, and leisure and education was different from
food
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 and
tobacco
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 based on
countries
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 . In 2002,
turkish
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Turkish
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 people spent the greatest
proportion
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 of their income on
food
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, drinks, and
tobacco
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with
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at
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 32.14%, followed by
ireland
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Ireland
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(28.91%)
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then
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and then
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spain
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Spain
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(18.80%).
On the
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contrary
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contrary,
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 the lowest
proportion
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 of expenditure on
food
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 and
tobacco
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were
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was
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Italy
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in Italy
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 and
sweden
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Sweden
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 with 16.36% and 15.77%, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 Italian people had spent
small
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a small
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 amount on
food
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 and
tobacco
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, for clothing and footwear they had spent much more than the other
countries
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 with 9%.
In addition
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,
This
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 is the case for Sweden which they had spent second the most among the given
countries
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 with 3.22% on leisure and education, after
turkey
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Turkey
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 with 4.35%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, food, tobacco, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • significant
  • analysis
  • break down
  • speculate
  • cultural factors
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • comparison and contrast
  • evolve
  • impact
  • economy
  • society
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