Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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Certainly, there are many different

sports

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all around the

world

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, and the interest

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games among

people

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have

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become increased.

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, Some

people

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believe that not all

sports

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are entertaining and safe for physical well-being, but

still

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due to

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craziness, some individuals take part in dangerous

sports

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. In

this

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essay, I will explain why

people

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prefer challenging

sports

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over others, and suggest the possible solution that might be taken to deal with

this

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complex matter. There are numerous games which are dangerous for physical well-being.

Firstly

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cricket

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is the most famous sport all around the

world

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, loved by all age groups

people

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. In

cricket

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, the hard ball is made up of leather,

used

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and used

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for

the

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bowling. The ball is too strong, it can break the bones of batsmen easily. In 2002,

for instance

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, the Australian cricketer, Phillip Hughes died during

test

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a test

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match, because

ball

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the ball

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hit

head

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their head

his head

her head

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badly.

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, the doctor called for his death immediately.

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It’s a dangerous game,

people

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are still die-heart

fan

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fans

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cricket

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. The attraction to dangerous

sports

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can be attributed to various factors,

such

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the

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social pressure, and the allure of pushing personal limits. Despite the risks involved, individuals are drawn to the adrenaline rush and sense of achievement that comes with participating in

such

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sports

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Secondly

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, football is

also

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the most popular game all around the

world

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, including 11

players

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. In football,

players

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often sustain injuries

while

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attempting to score goals

due to

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collisions with each other. But whenever

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the FIFA

World

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Cup

held

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is held

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, all individuals around the

world

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moves

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to the hosted country and enjoy

to watch

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watching

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the live matches with their loved ones. In order to resolve these issues. The

sport

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federation is working continuously to

safe

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save

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a life of the athletes, who are playing for their beloved country.

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, the

cricket

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administrative body called the International

Cricket

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Council

ensure

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ensures

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that all

players

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have

the

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apply

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safety

essential

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essentials

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, like elbow and knee

pad

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pads

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, and

made

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makes

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the helmet compulsory for the

betsmen

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batsmen

batsman

, even

the

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if the

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bowler is a spinner.

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, the coach of football must ensure that the

players

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are hydrated and are fully equipped with

essentials

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items. Cooling down and stretching

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are

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also

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important for

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players

a player

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players

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to avoid

heat-up

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the heat-up

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situation

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with their opponents. In conclusion, despite the dangers of some

sports

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people

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are loving

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love

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them

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and

passionate

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to become

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about becoming

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the

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part of their favourite teams.

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, the

sports

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federation

need

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to ensure that all

players

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are safe during the match, and

they

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that they

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are hydrated and fully equipped with

essentials

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essential

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items, which protect their

body

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bodies

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from injuries.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

427 words

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Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

Your opinion

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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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