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The table below gives information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia

The table below gives information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia
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The given table illustrates the data of
marriages
 and
age
 in Australia between 1960 and 2000.
This
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summarised
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 on January 28, 2023.
Overall
, the number of
marriages
, both
religion
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 and civil, increased
in
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 a stable rate. Alongside
with
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this
 is the rise of
bride
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the bride
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 and bridegroom's average
age
. On the
first
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 hand, the amount of
marriages
 in Australia witnessed an upward trend. In 1960, there were 25000
religion
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couples
 and 8000 civil
couples
. 10 years
after
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,
this
 number rose
up
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to 3000 in
religion
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marriages
 and 4000 in civil.
Moreover
, in 1980, the figures
of
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religion
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marriages
 plumed dramatically to 50000 and to 16000
with
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for
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 civil.
However
, the data
of
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on
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religion
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religious
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 marriage experienced a downward trend in the next 10 years, with only 32000
couples
 married in
religion
.
While
 civil
couples
 still rose to 23000 in the same year. And in 2000, civil
marriages
 reached the peak point with 40000
couples
.
Besides
 the
increasing
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 in the number of
marriage
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marriages
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,
this
 nation witnessed
the
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 rise in
ages
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the ages
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 of people who decided to
be tie
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 the knot. The
age
 of the bridegrooms from 1960 to 2000
always
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is always
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 older than the brides. In 1960, the average of
female
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females
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 who got married was 21
while
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the male
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male
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males
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was
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 24. The gap
of
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age
in
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between
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2
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the 2
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genders was smaller
in
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from
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 1970 to 1980 which was
2-year-old
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2 years old
.
Moreover
, the oldest
of
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women
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woman
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 was 30 and
men
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the men
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was
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were
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 32 in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words marriages, age, religion, couples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Evolution
  • Trend
  • Cultural shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Societal changes
  • First marriage
  • Contributing factors
  • Education
  • Career opportunities
  • Societal norms
  • Personal independence
  • Gender differences
  • Disparities
  • Legal age
  • Access to education
  • Implications
  • Family structure
  • Childbearing
  • Population demographics
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