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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house price in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The presented bar chart illustrates the average cost of
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 in
five
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 various cities from 1990 to 2002 in comparison to prices in 1989.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in the first
five
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years
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 of the given period, three cities namely,
Tokyo
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, London, and New York witnessed a decrease in the price of houses,
while
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 in the following
five
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years
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, only
Tokyo
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 experienced a decline. In detail,
in
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from
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 1990 to 1995,
Farnkfurt
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Frankfurt
 and Madrid generally witnessed an upward
around
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of around
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 3%,
while
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Tokyo
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 and London declined more than 5 per cent. In the meantime,
the
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apply
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accomodation
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accommodation
 prices decreased
5
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by 5
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% in New York. In the following
five
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years
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, compared to the
last
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five
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years
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,
cost
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the cost
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 of places in New York increased 10%, which raised to 5% more expensive than in 1989.
Furthermore
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, the UK average price of houses rose sharply to 10%;
however
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,
Tokyo
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accomodation
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accommodation
 costs remained 5% cheaper
as
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than
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 it was in 1989.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words five, years, tokyo with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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