The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows how the unemployed spent their day in the British previous year.
According to
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the table,
men
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and
women
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have a high proportion in three actions (housework, shopping, and job hunting).
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, 49% of
women
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go shopping and about 19% of
men
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are interested in shopping in the morning, from one point of view both males and females are not popular in spending their moment
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drinking, playing sports, visiting town and other mentioned activities.
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, almost all
men
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and
women
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have the same share in drinking.
on the other hand
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, there are some other activities like walking, decorating, gardening, staying in bed, and visiting relatives that both genders have their own shares.
Men
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are more interested in gardening and walking
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women
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are fun of visiting relatives or friends and watching TV programs.
Overall
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, the chart illustrates the proportion of how unemployed spent their time in the UK
last
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year. Both
men
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and
women
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spent more time on housing and few time in activities like drinking and playing sports.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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