Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Both
men
and
women
have specific
charateristics
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characteristics
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that allow
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them to complete different tasks
according to
their potential.
Due to
this
, there is a controversial discussion is whether it would be best for
both
sexes to have a job which
suit
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their personal abilities.
However
, others contend that
both
are equal and can do as efficiently as other
gender
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genders
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can do.
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writer will analyse from
both
perspectives to reach
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conclusion. It must be acknowledged that males and females have their particular strengths and can perform well in certain tasks.
For example
,
women
tend to be exceptionally good at taking
cares
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of household activities and children. As they are usually kind, lovely and diligent,
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suited
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for jobs which require devotion and organisational skills.
Simarly
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Similarly
,
men
also
have special traits related to their physical power and hard mental.
For instance
, males are more likely to be strong and confident which
enable
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them to give excellent performance in areas
such
as earning bread and butter, making
decision
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decisions
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or
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the
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emotional
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.
However
, even though
both
genders are good at their field as mentioned, we cannot ignore the changing trend
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in
this
era. Nowadays, education is
on
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a
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wide spread
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widespread
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,
more
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and more
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and more
women
are breaking the barrier of sexes which now they can undertake the role of
men
. They can be seen placed
at
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serveral
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several
vital positions, from doctors,
teachers
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and teachers
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to leaders of the
goverment
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government
movement
. In the same way,
men
are
also
indulging themselves in household tasks by looking after their children and doing household chores.
Therefore
, it cannot be said that
both
of
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the
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genders are best suitable to do only one type of work.
As
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a
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conclusion, in today’s world
women
and
men
can
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capable of doing any
jobs
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. Excluding a male or a female from a certain profession because of his or her gender doesn't have any logical reason. Believing a gender is not
a
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suitable for a certain job is just an
out fashioned
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thought. There is no limitation for
the
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men
and
women
in the job market except prejudice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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