Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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believed by many thoughts that each sex has various qualities and
this
leads to some fixed jobs which are only suitable for
either
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men
or women.
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writer totally agrees with
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statement and will outline the most persuasive reasons why. The most obvious difference is about physical abilities.
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men
particularly,
they
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are provided with stronger bodies and muscles
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to women since they were born.
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, with muscular appearances, males are usually able to do heavy
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, take lifting things or blue-collar
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As a result
,
men
sometimes can meet many harsh demands which are required to have a fixed occupation.
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, females have many disadvantages to males who have more physical abilities. Indeed, females usually tend to prioritize doing housework and even cooking rather than trying many other tough works
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the
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of their physical qualities.
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,
within
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higher carefulness and
disciplines
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, they much prefer to be an accountant or even a teacher since they occasionally lack
of
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responsibilities.
Consequently
, feminine people are
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appropriate
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less strenuous jobs.
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these things into account, each gender has other conditions to have a stable occupation for themselves.
However
, it is not equivalent to either
men
or women can only choose and work these jobs suitable for their sexes because it is not compulsory for anyone to obey these rules at all,
accordingly
,
this
also
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  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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