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Discuss advantages and disadvantages of social media!

#media
Social
media
 has made a revolution in communications, giving both advantages and disadvantages in the world. On the positive side, it
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 global connectivity
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 and serves as a powerful tool for information dissemination.
However
, the spread of misinformation,
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and dangerous
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mental health impacts. The speed at which information travels on social
media
 has led to the widespread dissemination of misinformation,
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 trust in reliable sources. Personal data becomes vulnerable to use.
While
 social
media
 offers unprecedented opportunities for connection and information sharing, it is crucial to decrease its bad effects. Achieving a balanced living with social
media
 requires responsible usage and critical thinking.
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Expand on both advantages and disadvantages of social media more evenly to provide a more balanced discussion.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This will help to demonstrate your understanding and provide a clearer argument.
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Maintain better logical flow between ideas. This can be achieved by using linking phrases effectively.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider adding an opening introduction sentence that clearly states what the essay will discuss, and a concluding sentence or paragraph that summarizes your main points or provides a final thought.

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