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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree wit this statement?

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In the modern world,
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information
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 shifted to digital platforms.Even reading
newspapers
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 and
books
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also
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 moved rapidly towards digital.It is
most
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essential for our fast-growing technology and
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 it is effortless for common
people
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 to save their time and money. In
this
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i
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 agree with the perspective that in the
future
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.
people
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 will completely shift towards the digital
platform
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 for
newspapers
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instead
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 of reading it in offline sources.
To begin
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 with,online reading is more convenient for
people
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.They are eager to read online news and digital
books
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 more than
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physical
books
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 or
newspapers
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.
People
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 can read anything through
internet
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 without leaving their homes.
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, physical
books
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 or
newspapers
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 are needed to buy in stores.
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,it is wandering
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time-consuming and
also
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 expensive.
Furthermore
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,online reading has a facility for personalization.
People
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 have the choice
in
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 reading what is most significant to them.
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, most
of
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the
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people
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 have an interest
to read
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in reading
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books
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 personally.so the online
platform
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 made that provision to whoever wanted. Another reason,the production and manpower are too high when compared to the digital
platform
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.
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,printing papers is too expensive.
additionally
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,many surveys say most
of
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the
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people
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 are interested in online
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platform
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platforms
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instead
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 of physical
books
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.
Furthermore
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, digital reading is more eco-friendly.
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 , physical reading has problems
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 pollution,contamination and
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 deforestation.
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,more
people
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 turn to
eco-friendly
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 option of digital reading. In conclusion,the
future
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or
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of
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 reading is moving towards the online
platform
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.We should accept the reality and stand helpful for an
eco-friendliest
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 and non-polluted environment in
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.Some believe even in
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future
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the future
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 many
people
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 will have an interest in print media.
However
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, the rapid growth of online platforms is tremendous.So we cannot deny that,We should accept it.
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structure and clarity
Focus on presenting a clear argument structure. Ensure your thesis statement precisely reflects your stance and clearly outline the essay structure in the introduction.
cohesion
Use a variety of conjunctions and cohesive devices to enhance the flow of your essay. However, ensure they are used correctly and enhance rather than confuse the reader.
task response
To fully address the task, ensure your argument covers both sides of the issue to some extent, even if you have a strong opinion. This demonstrates an ability to engage critically with the topic.
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