Some people tend to take temporary jobs (they only work for few month of year), for they have time to do other things.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Few people want to do
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time
service and
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of the
time
do
another
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work. I strongly agree that
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time
jobs are beneficial for individuals because of gathering experience.
In
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one hand, by doing temporary duty a person can easily obtain
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experience, which helps them to find
better
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job
.
For example
, some jobs in our country
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knowledgeable
person
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people
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who have previous wisdom in
this
sector.
In addition
, they are able to cope
up
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neumerous
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numerous
skills
such
as
,
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easily
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communication with rural people and leadership. It
is
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not only
develop
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soft skills but
also
influence
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them to meet with various cultural activities.
As a result
, they can adapt
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any situation and
pass
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enjoyable
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time
, which
assist
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them
lead
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to
a
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easy life.
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, it
encourage
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them to earn money
besides
other
works
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work
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.
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,
while
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a person
earn
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extra money he can support their family
members
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demand
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.
Also
, if a temporary worker can complete their duty properly, they have
a
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opportunity to obtain
permanent
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job
in
this
company.
As a result
, they can get more facilities than others.
On the other hand
, there
some
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drawbacks which create a stressful life. Temporary work can not ensure a secure
job
and it does not give
job
security.
For example
, company authorities can be fired up
any
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time
.
Additionally
, they
have
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not work like a
full
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time
employee, which is a great barrier to their economic development.
Also
, it
is not provide
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some basic things, like health insurance,
home
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rent subsidies, which demotive them and they
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them a lower class employee. In conclusion, the drawbacks are not very much affect
anyones
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anyone
anyone's
lifestyle
whereas
this
short
time
service
encourage
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a
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people to do better in their next stages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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