In spite of advances made in agricultural, many people around the world still go hungry. what is this the case? what can be done about this problem?
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although
farming has increased in all around the Linking Words
world
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money
and economic policy the Use synonyms
government
and inhabitants by collaborating with each other can solve Use synonyms
this
problem.
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money
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people
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money
and policy speak first in all around the Use synonyms
world
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money
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For example
, Iran’s population contributes 1/100 as large as the number of all Linking Words
people
on the earth. Use synonyms
Although
it has a good system of agriculture, there are almost 60 million poor Linking Words
people
in the whole country Use synonyms
due to
the high inflation rate and interest rate which are on the moon. So, Linking Words
people
can not purchase the ingredients and food for them selves or their families. On the other, Iran faces a lack of job vacancies for young folk because managers do not have enough Use synonyms
money
to pay workers and pay Use synonyms
money
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due to
the high inflation rate which leads the community to be still poor.
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However
, there are a wide variety of ways that by collaboration between the Linking Words
government
and residents, Use synonyms
this
problem will be solved. Linking Words
Firstly
, the Linking Words
government
should increase more export than import to make more Use synonyms
money
and reconstruct economy’s pattern. Followed by investing Use synonyms
money
in businesses and the youngster as new force workers. Use synonyms
As a result
, job opportunities are grown, and Linking Words
people
have work and salary to pay their expenditure. Use synonyms
Also
, we do not have managing Linking Words
money
courses as mandatory subject in schools and universities ,Use synonyms
while
it is the most important knowledge for human for survival in these days. Linking Words
Moreover
, if Linking Words
people
are familiar with managing Use synonyms
money
, nobody in the Use synonyms
world
will be still hungry because of knowing how to handle and spend Use synonyms
money
.
In conclusion, hunger and poverty are a controversial issue in the Use synonyms
world
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whereas
many countries do not have a health economy. I wish the Linking Words
government
would make a close-knit relationship with Use synonyms
people
to solve Use synonyms
this
problem.Linking Words
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