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The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about levels of education by age range in Glasgow in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at a bar chart provided reveals the educational standards of five distinct age groups in Glasgow, measured in
percent
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, in 2010.
Overall
,
people
 who are from 24 to 35 years old have the most remarkable proportion of having
university
 degrees. In terms of
people
 over 75 years old, an overwhelming majority was taken up by those who did not have qualifications with 72, followed by
university
 certification with 25
while
 school
degree
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degrees
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 made up the least significant part. With regard to
people
 in the 50-75-year-olds, no other proportions are as high as
university
 degrees, which accounted for 50. At the opposite end of the scale, school graduation constitutes the most trivial part with 20. Meanwhile, no qualifications account for the second most notable amount with 20. As for the educational standards of those who are from 16 to 50 years
olds
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, despite having exactly the same proportion of
people
 not owning qualification with 9, they were slightly different in other types of degrees.
While
 the
university
 degree
along with
school
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 certificate of those who are at the age
from
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 16 to 24 and 35 to 35 were precisely similar with 71 and 20 respectively, 24-35-year-olds
people
 had more proportion of
university
 graduation with 76.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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