The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
In our society,
parents
are paying more attention to their kid's education. One TV documentary shows the culture
difference between Replace the word
cultural
parents
spending attention, how much time, and how much money on their kid's example with Asian and European. Asian parents
push more their kids because in
Asian society is more competitive. Their expectation from their child is more good band or good score. Change preposition
apply
As a result
of this
effort kids gain successful band
but most of them have Fix the agreement mistake
bands
golden
child complex. Correct article usage
a golden
Although
they can work hard alone, they have problem
within Fix the agreement mistake
problems
community
. If not only Add an article
the community
parents
but also
teachers resolve this
issue, it will more problem
in our Fix the agreement mistake
problems
future
society. In the future
they will grow up to be more lonely, selfish and cold people. Add a comma
future,
Thats
way in order to the Correct your spelling
That
this
future
problem
, best
way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports Add an article
the best
such
as basketball, football, tennis, volleyball, hockey etc. The team
sports have Correct article usage
Team
lot
of advantages for kids. It is Change the article
a lot
very
good opportunity not only to learn from each Add an article
a very
other's
but Change noun form
other
also
to get to know about responsibility and respect others. In conclusion, there is one word "Go alone, if you go fast. Go with others, if you go far". If we teach them to cooperate with children when they are in kindergarten, our future
will be more bright. in the future
, no crime, no pollution, no problem
with daily life and . Correct article usage
The best
Best
way to learn Correct article usage
The best
Fix the infinitive
to cooperate
cooperate
is Fix the infinitive
to cooperate
Change preposition
through team
team
sports. I totally agree with Change preposition
through team
idea
.Add an article
the idea
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