Some peoplethink that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that there are certain
jobs
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which are suitable for
made
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males
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and others for female because each gender
have
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their
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its
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own qualities.
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writer agrees with
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statement and will explain why in the following essay. First of all, there are some
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that
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is
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suitable for
men
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because they are stronger than female. One of these
jobs
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is football player, the number of football
player
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players
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whom are male outweighs the number of female football
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players
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in
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all over the world.
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job
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required
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a strong body, the level of training is extreme and it is not suitable for
women
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.
In contrast
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, some
jobs
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which do not require
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,
it
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will be suitable for
women
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.
For example
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,
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the cook
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cook
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cooking
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is
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work
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a work
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that can be difficult to learn by a part of
men
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, but most
of
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women
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the women
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know how to cook and the number of
women
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work
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as
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a
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cook
job
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such
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as
chef
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a chef
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is much more than
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apply
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men
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one
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apply
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.
Moreover
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, there are some
jobs
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that are suitable with
character
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the character
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of each
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gender
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. One of them
are
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office workers, the amount of
work
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and the pressure at
workplace
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the workplace
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are high and it
will
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is
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more suitable for
men
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than
women
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because
men
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are more persistent in their mentality than
women
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and they can do
this
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job
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.
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, with the carefulness of
women
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,
they
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apply
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can
work
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as
an
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apply
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artist
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artists
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or do housework because these
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job
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require
a
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careful
hand
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hands
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, so they are suitable for
women
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.
To conclude
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, there are some
jobs
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that are suitable for
male
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males
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or
female
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females
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. Both genders have to choose the right
job
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to have a successful career with their abilities.
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