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some prople think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#prople #men #women #qualities #jobs
some
inviduals
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individuals
belive
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believe
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thhat
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that
 there are
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the difference
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difference
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differences
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 between
men
 and
women
 in qualities.
As a result
, some
jobs
 are suitable for
men
 and others for
women
. I totally agree to what extent.
This
 author is to prove my agreement
to
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 the view. It must be
obseved
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observed
 that the personality of
men
 is not the same as
women
.
Men
's
personality
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personalities
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is
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are
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 likely to be braver than
women
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women's
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, so
that
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investor
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investors
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,
worker
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workers
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 and
discoverer
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discoverers
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 are the
jobs
that
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the
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numbers
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number
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 of male
employee
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employees
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 is higher than female.
While
,
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women
's characteristic trend is more patient than
men
. So
that
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,
women
 are suitable for some
jobs
 like
psychologist
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psychologists
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 or
assistant
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assistants
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. Another vital reason is that in
almost
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most
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 cases
man
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men
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 are left-brain-user which means that they have
an
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the
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 ability
of calculating
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 and solving math so
the
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apply
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jobs
 which
requires
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require
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that
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those
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 qualities must be more suitable for
men
.
In contrast
, the majority of
right-brain-user
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right-brain-users
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is
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are
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women
,
in other
words
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words,
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women
 are likely to be more creative than
man
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men
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,
this
 helps them in some works
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and need
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need
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needs
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 various imagination. In conclusion,
men
 and
women
 have
difference
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different
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 qualities and each job requires
the
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apply
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suitable abilities. So that people should
chooses
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choose
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 a
joab
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job
 which suitable for their abilities and gender.

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