The chart below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The chart below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
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the
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of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised several
countries
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period between 1980 to 1990. In general, what stands out from the chart is that
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industrialised
countries
significantly improved
while
developing
countries
swiftly increased to average years of schooling. Looking at the details, in spending on research and development industrialised
countries
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as many developing
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in 1980 but industrialised dramatically grew
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400 in 1990.
On the other hand
, scientists and technical per 1000 people, industrialised
countries
much
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of developing
countries
in 1980. After that, developing
countries
were under 20 and industrialised
countries
were above 60. With regards to, average years of schooling, industrialised
countries
and developing
countries
, the former considerably climbed above 8 in 1980, improved above 10 in 1990.
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the latter were above 2 in 1980 and were almost 4 in 1990,
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years of schooling
developing
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countries
much more than scientists and technical and spending on research.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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