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The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Reymouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #reymouth
The given map illustrates the village of Reymouth's changes between the year 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, more
accomondations
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accommodations
 are built in the present than in 1995 and some amenities in the past are replaced by
the
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apply
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others.
Moreover
,
in
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at
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the
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apply
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present, the fishing port is
removed
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being removed
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while
 a new car park is
constructed
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being constructed
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. First and foremost, the number of
accomondation
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accommodation
accommodations
 is increasing in today's time. In the left corner of the maps, more housings in the present are constructed compared with
one's
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one
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 in 1995's map. Not only 2 more houses are built to the west of the map but there is
also
 a new road is
expaded
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expanded
.
Besides
, to the north of the sea, the place
used
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that used
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 to be a fish market in 1995
is
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was
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 replaced to make a way in using for a new purpose -
apparments
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apartments
.
On the other hand
, there are some changes in
construction
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the construction
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 of
this
 area. The farmland in the East now turns into a new place to play golf. And the trees in
forest
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the forest
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 park are taken down in order to
built
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build
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 a new tennis field. To the South of the tennis, there is a new car park.
Although
 the hotel is
the
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apply
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similary
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similar
in
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on
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 both maps, there
is
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are
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 still
a
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apply
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differences in
near
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the nearby
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 area. To the left of the hotel, shops are now being replaced by the
restraunts
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restaurants
. And the fishing port was just a place that appeared in 1995.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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