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The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015.

The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015.
#development #college #campus
The map displays the college
campus
 layout by 2005 and the evolution made in 2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the college
campus
 expanded in size, so
campus
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 was more functional than before. Some buildings covered larger areas,
while
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was
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in
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 a smaller size because of the limitation of land area. Looking at the diagram in more
details
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, the most important equipment for school staff and students was
parking
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a parking
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 lot, which was moved from the southeast of the picture to the northwestern area,
while
 the
origin
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 place was used for
dining
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 hall and
bigger
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 than before.
Due to
 the playground
was
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 located
at
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further
 north, the space between
playground
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the playground
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 and
dining
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the dining
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 hall
were
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 decided to
built
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 a new library, which the school lacked in the year
of
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2005. We can see that the new
equipments
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equipment
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 in the year 2025
were
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student
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the student
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 center and clinic, which
located
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the
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 lower left corner of the diagram and next to the stadium, respectively. As for the stadium, which accounted for nearly one-fourth area of the
campus
, since the utilization rate was too low,
school
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 authority decided to deflate it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words campus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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