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The two pies illustrate online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. One of the key changes over

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decade is that people started to read books and watch films much more in comparison with 2003, the first from them increased from 19% to 22% and the second increased from 21% to 33 %. Another general change is that new

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have begun to buy

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clothes and travel items, looking at the pies, I suppose that they

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to spend more time at home

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watching interesting films, reading exciting books and less on the streets with each other in 2013 than in 2003. Demand

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clothes fell from 24% to 16% and it fell

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travel items from 36% to 29%, that

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, it can be said that the two

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charts show that New Zealand residents began to buy more things for

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at home and

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things for

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and for walking on the streets. (158 words)

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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