Some say that the best way to help poor countries is financial aids. Other say other forms of aid should be given. Discuss both views and give your opinion

A part of the world thinks monetary options are the best form of support for poor
countries
,
whereas
, others
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the non-monetory
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non-monetary
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are better. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views.
However
, I tend to think before sending help government should
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ask for
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a request
request
for help from others.
Firstly
, financial help means supporting a nation,
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infrastructure. The undeveloped
countries
can invest in their strengths or equipment.
Moreover
, financial help can increase the quality of life for citizens and sharply increase their education.
Additionally
,
such
investment can give a big push for the economy and create a lot of job opportunities for citizens.
On the other hand
, forms of aid can create more and more job creation for citizens.
Furthermore
,
this
kind of helps another sphere of undeveloped
countries
and obviously can help in some
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moments in the country. A good illustration of
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in Turkey after the earthquake all
countries
united to help with food and help to carry out people from danger zones.
To sum up
, any help for every country can create good relationships between
countries
. From my point of view, any help to any country may provide greater opportunities for the two
countries
to interact internationally.
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