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E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

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It is a common thought that E-mail has
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 enormous negative impact
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 life.
While
 there are several benefits when it has
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 impact on on professional and social communication, I believe that
overall
 it is an
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undesirable
 development It is understandable why some people propose that
Email
 has a huge effect on
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 of
work
 and
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community
. For one, the key
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 behind
this
 thought is the development of the technological age. In fact, social development will change people's
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, using
email
 shows professionalism in the working environment.
In addition
 to
this
, communicating by
email
 can help us preserve important messages,
for example
, Zalo is one of the messaging platforms that makes message retention ineffective as it is easy to recall messages.
As a result
,
Email
 will be the most reasonable tool to confirm
work
 and communicate between people. Despite the above argument, I firmly believe that there are more disadvantages
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 using e-mail than advantages. It must first recognized that t there are many types of
emails
 sent to us every day,
such
 as promotional
emails
, social network notifications, or even
work
emails
. In fact,
this
 makes it easy for us to lose important information, if any, and search for old
emails
. It's
also
 very difficult because there are so many
emails
 coming in. There are many communication platforms today and communication will be simpler and not have too much impact on us, searching for usernames will
also
 be easier,
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 and searching for
work
 files will
also
 be easier. easier. In conclusion, I agree that using
email
 has more disadvantages than the benefits it brings
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Ensure a more coherent and logical structure by creating clearer connections between your ideas. Use more cohesive devices and topic sentences to guide the reader through your argument more effectively.
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To fully address the task, ensure you explore both advantages and disadvantages thoroughly, giving each equal treatment. Incorporate a balanced examination to strengthen your argument.
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Improve clarity and comprehension by refining your ideas more explicitly. Aim for a straightforward expression of your points, avoiding overly complex wording or vague statements.
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Use concrete examples to substantiate your claims. Examples that are directly relevant to your main points will strengthen your argument and add depth to your response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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