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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter, » explain why you were at the restaurant » describe the problems » write about the action you want the manager to take Write atleast 150words

#restaurant #manager #action #atleast
Dear Ms. Franklin, I am Paul , I am a student of your evening batch of computer science
course
. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that , I am not able to continue with the
course
 because of office work .
To begin
 with , I
got
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enrolled in
this
course
 two days ago and for your information, I have already paid my full fees. Actually,
this
course
 really will help me to enhance my skills .
Moreover
 , it is useful for
overall
 development in my career
that is
 why I have decided to join
this
course
 .
Furthermore
 ,I am not able to attend my classes because my company is deploying me at a client location for a few weeks. But I will be back by the end of next month. Afterwards, I can take my continue to attend my classes in the evening. Hereby I request you to , Please transfer me in next month batch. I will be highly obliged to you.
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task achievement
Ensure the letter directly addresses the topics provided, that is, explain why you were at the restaurant, describe the problems, and the actions you want the manager to take.
coherence and cohesion
Use a suitable greeting and closing that matches the context of the complaint. For a letter to a restaurant manager, formal salutations are expected.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a clear logical structure by organizing information into appropriate paragraphs with each having a single clear idea or point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unforgettable evening turned disappointing
  • anticipation
  • patronage
  • culinary experience
  • subpar
  • palate
  • lackluster service
  • rectify
  • compensation
  • amicable resolution
  • clientele satisfaction
  • due diligence
  • apology
  • quality assurance
  • redress
  • expectation management
  • constructive feedback
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