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The pictures below show how tea is produced. They also illustrate the process of making a cup of tea. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The pictures below indicate some data about the trend of producing
tea
 from
grow
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growth
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 in India and China to the final step which is
drink
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to drink
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 and enjoy
this
 beverage.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are 18 steps for producing
tea
.
Initially
, the
tea
 is grown in India and China.
Then
,
tea
 seeds are sown by farmers. After plants have been grown by the sunshine, the
tea
 leaves are
then
 picked and put in
basket
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baskets
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 by farmers in order to dry them in front of the sun.
the next step is
 that the dried
tea
 leaves are packed into boxes. Once boxes
being
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are
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 loaded
into
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onto
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 a lorry, they are
then
 delivered to supermarkets which place
costumers
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customers
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 can buy these products and
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the product is taken to
costumers`
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customers`
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home
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homes
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. The following steps are about how to make a
cup
 of
tea
.
To begin
 with,
kettle
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a kettle
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 is poured with water and
then
 poured kettle is boiled and
then
tea
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the tea
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 bag is dropped into a
cup
 of hot water which was poured by
kettle
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the kettle
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.
Next,
this
cup
 of
tea
 is
leaved
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left
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 for 2 minutes to prepare
it
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apply
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for
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a drink
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drink
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drinking
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.
At
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In
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 the next
steps
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steps,
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 sugar and milk can be added to the
cup
 of
tea
 for drink and
enjoy
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enjoyment
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.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure by introducing distinct stages in separate paragraphs to enhance readability.
Coherence & Cohesion
Add an introductory sentence to provide context and a conclusion that summarizes the key points for a complete argument structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support main points with more detailed descriptions or examples to make explanations clearer and more engaging.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task, ensuring that each step of the tea production and preparation process is clearly mentioned.
Task Achievement
Clarify ideas by elaborating on each stage with more details to create a comprehensive understanding of the process.
Task Achievement
Include specific, real-world examples or comparisons to make your response more informative and relevant.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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