A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice

Dear Malik. Hello. It is me again. What are you planning
this
summer holiday
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I mean, you should
be go
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somewhere. I have an idea. Your presence would be appreciated at
camping
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the camping
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holiday. You will
be
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enjoy
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enjoy
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. Because of there are things modern technology and comfortable for rest. And,
also
you can learn skills which you like. In my
opinion
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it is very useful.
Then
, I
would
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say
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tell
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you about
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. There is
not
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signal. It means you can not talk with your family and friends
in
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whole
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week. After that, there
have been
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a
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hot water for the bathe twice a week. I think
this
is a big problem. But, you should
be
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get used. I am going to very
this
camping with my friends.
Due
to
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, I
love
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chill out with them. They are my bestie. So, I have
been
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invited you too. We will have a fun time. I promise you. Please let me know as soon as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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