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Some people think that plastic should be banned. Others believe that it is impossible to get rid of it. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #plastic
Nowadays the amount of
plactic
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plastic
 is increasing day by day. Many often
people
 think that
this
 material should be banned mainly because it can be
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harmful
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nature other
people
 tend to think it's impossible to reject
this
 material in our life. In
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 I will totally disagree
this
 kind of material
have
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 to
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prohibated
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prohibited
due to
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envoirment
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environment
. There are a lot of reasons why believe that governments ought not to ban the need
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 elastic materials, but the main one is that moulded plays a major role in the world
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 in businesses. Elastic, in
this
 case, is used as a container to keep water in it.
For instance
, companies that
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 the water, namely "Nestle", spend a lot of money on it.
As a result
, I believe that elastic
material
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 an important part in industries. Another point to consider is that it will be difficult and almost impossible for
people
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the handling of moulded materials.
In other words
, almost everything today is made from elastic.
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, all
people
 in the world use bottles, pens and even
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.
Consequently
, the ban on
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 will certainly have a far-reaching impact on companies that produce their products by using it, because industries will have no choice but to suspend their production.
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Task Achievement
To enhance your score in 'Task Response', make sure your essay directly addresses the question posed, offering a clear opinion on whether plastic should be banned. Incorporate more detailed and specific examples to support your viewpoint. Also, ensure that your conclusion summarizes your opinion and the reasons behind it effectively.
Coherence & Cohesion
For 'Coherence and Cohesion', focus on structuring your essay in a more organized manner. Begin with an engaging introduction that presents your main argument. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details and examples. Use a variety of linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly. A concise conclusion that reaffirms your stance will also help.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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