The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
The graph illustrates the proportion of population for four distinct countries in
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Asia over the decades, spanning from 1970 to 2020, with extrapolations to 2040. Generally speaking,
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population rose in all four countries over the whole period.
However
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the increases seen in
malaysia
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and
indonesia
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Indonesia
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far
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greater than those
philippines
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Philippines
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and
thailand
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.
While
the data for both the Philippines and
Malaysia
started at approximately 30
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, Thailand and
Indonesia
were around 15
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in 1970. By 1990, the percentage of people living in
Indonesia
and
Malaysia
had steadily risen It can be clearly seen that between 2010 and 2020, the proportion of urban citizens living in
Malaysia
and
Indonesia
slightly increased,
while
that of the Philippines and Thailand remained steady.
On the other hand
, with a dramatic increase in population from 1970 to 2020 and the mentioned predictions extending to 2040,
Malaysia
seems to be the most densely populated country among the four.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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