The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
The graph illustrates the proportion of population for four distinct countries in
the
Asia over the decades, spanning from 1970 to 2020, with extrapolations to 2040.
Generally speaking, Correct article usage
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mass
population rose in all four countries over the whole period. Add an article
the mass
However
the increases seen in Add a comma
However,
malaysia
and Change the capitalization
Malaysia
indonesia
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Indonesia
far
greater than those Add a missing verb
are far
philippines
and Change the capitalization
Philippines
thailand
.
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Thailand
While
the data for both the Philippines and Malaysia
started at approximately 30 percent
, Thailand and Change the spelling
per cent
Indonesia
were around 15 percent
in 1970. By 1990, the percentage of people living in Change the spelling
per cent
Indonesia
and Malaysia
had steadily risen
It can be clearly seen that between 2010 and 2020, the proportion of urban citizens living in Malaysia
and Indonesia
slightly increased, while
that of the Philippines and Thailand remained steady.
On the other hand
, with a dramatic increase in population from 1970 to 2020 and the mentioned predictions extending to 2040, Malaysia
seems to be the most densely populated country among the four.Submitted by aleynacanacikel on
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