The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph down shows it is possible to produce electricity by using geothermal energy throw a meticulous process.
Overall
, the primary source is cold
water
and going throw five steps using 2 different pumps on each side , the main and most steps take place in the core of the earth. First of all , the cold
water
, go the well of injection by
cold
Add an article
a cold
show examples
water
pump
that is
pumped down and the
distence
Correct your spelling
distance
between the ground and the well
about
Add a missing verb
is about
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4.5km ,
then
going
Wrong verb form
goes
show examples
inside many hot rocks in a zone called a geothermal zone and 3 step in the production well where here
water
become hotter. At
last
2 steps again to the surface of the ground preparing to the 4th step by an up pump reaching the solid to condenser and by
a
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apply
show examples
steam go enter turbine generation which it is the
last
step before getting to electricity bridge to light the world.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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