The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
These pie charts indicate probable
population
changes
on
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the different ages of
people
between 2000 and 2050 in Italy and
Yemen
. In
Yemen
, in 2000, 46,3
percent
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of
population
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the population
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arised
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raised
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from 15-59
years
old
people
.
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of
Yemen
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population
shows that the
percentage
of
people
- who are 15-59
years
old-will
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old will
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increase
to 57.3
percent
.
People
- who
over
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60
years
old- had a slight
percent
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in
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the
population
in
Yemen
,in 2000. ( 3.6% ).
Moreover
,
pie
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chart
of
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2050 illustrates that there will be
slight
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a slight
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increase
during the period 2000 to 2050. Half of the
population
arised
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arose
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from 0-14
years
old humans in 2000.
However
,there will be numerous
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decreases
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between 2000 and 2050. In Italy,61,6
percent
of
population
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the population
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consisted
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of 15-
59
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59-year-old
years
old citizens.
However
, there will significant
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over the
50 year
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period. ( From 61,6 to 46,2 ) The
percentage
of 60+
years
old
people
were
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less
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lower than quarter, in 2000. (24.1%)
However
, the
percentage
of 60+
years
old
people
will
increase
by 18.2%. In 2000, 0-14
years
old
people
were
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a small
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part of
population
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the population
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. ( only 14.3) During the period 2000 to 2050, the
percantage
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percentage
of 0-14
years
old
people
will decrease slightly. ( From 14.3 to 11.5%)
Overall
, there will be
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an increase
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in the
percentage
of 60+ old
people
for
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both countries.
Furthermore
, the
percentage
of 0-14
years
old
people
will decrease in Italy and
Yemen
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people, yemen, percent, years, percentage, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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