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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some argue that
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residence in a
country
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 where the majority
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 native speakers, can cause significant social and practical issues. I totally agree with
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 statement because the
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 problem is a burden for a corporate culture and there is a tendency for misleading
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 understanding problems.
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 is the key factor that keeps people together by maintaining good communication and relationships between each other.
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, there is a growing tendency of people
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migrating
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 to foreign countries where they have to deal with
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the
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different languages. it is quite challenging for anyone to get used to unfamiliar tongues.
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 because most of the time,
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 hesitate to communicate with
foreigners
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due to
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 their lack of fluency
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 the native’s mother tongue.
This
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 is a distinguishing feature in some nations.
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for
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 example, in Amsterdam, they
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 the cultural event called “Arun- mhua” and they do not allow any
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foreigners
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 to participate
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 because they believe that it is a sin.
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, visitors are unable to maintain good
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between
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natives
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. the
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 problem often misleads
foreigners
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due to
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For instance
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, in most
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 the menus in the restaurants have been designed in their mother tongue. If the Foreigner
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 unable to understand what is written there, they are unable to order at least a proper meal.
Moreover
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,
this
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 barrier significantly impacts
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finding
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 or destination in a foreign
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. Sometimes, you may hear
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the name of somewhere and once you search
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 on maps, there is no location under that name. These are the frequent problems that almost all people who visit
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the
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 foreign
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,
prone
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 to face
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 the lack of awareness about the languages. In conclusion, living in a foreign
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 with native speakers often causes serious practical and social issues.
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 barrier denies
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access
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good cooperation with
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 and,
foreigners
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 are often misled unintentionally by them because of
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 poor and understanding.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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