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n the future, nobody will buy printers newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
There is
opinion
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an opinion
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 , that individuals prefer to read
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the magazine
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magazine
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magazines
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,
books
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 and other stuff online
instead
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 of buying
printed
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the printed
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version
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versions
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 of
books
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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 in the
future
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 . In
this
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essay
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 we will examine the reasons
of
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 agreement and disagreement with
this
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 issue.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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,
nowdays
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nowadays
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 with
improvement
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the improvement
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 of technology ,
people
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 read printed
books
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 once in
blue
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 moon .
Body paragraph 2
As a result
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 , in the
future
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 humankind may just read
books
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especially
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 with
help
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the help
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 of
smart phone
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smartphones
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 and electronic readers.
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 , when humankind
use
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smart phone
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smartphone
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 and electric devices
they
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, they can learn anytime and anywhere
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the
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can modify the settings of display and brightness at
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 of a hat.
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 , it will be
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 of lack of wood resources in the
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 .
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 , citizens will have to read
books
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 in the
future
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.
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, a large
amount
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 of trees, which are the most important resource for
papers
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 are destroying every minute
world-wide
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worldwide
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.
Body paragraph 4
On the other hand
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, there is a sense of tangibility for
people
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 who read
books
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 and magazines physically.
Body paragraph 5
Moreover
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, reading physically provides a better focus on the learning materials which is crucial for
Body paragraph 6
Some
world-wide
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worldwide
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 top-class universities. Some study shows that
people
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 can read longer hours in comparison to reading stuff online. Since
,
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that’s
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bring
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brings
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 about
headache
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headaches
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 and eye strain.
Body paragraph 7
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, one of the most satisfying
thing
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 for expert readers is flicking through the pages and
follow
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 the story.
Conclusion
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of
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the fact, that
people
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 will be able
read
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to read
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 anything online , individuals
also
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 continue to read stuff physically , to my way of thinking , it is impossible to prevent technology .
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however
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however,
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 some
people
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 need that nostalgic sense in their life.

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task achievement
To improve your score, ensure you fully address all parts of the task. It is essential that you not only discuss future trends in reading preferences but also clearly state your own position regarding the statement in the prompt.
task achievement
Develop your main ideas further with more detailed and relevant examples. Also, make sure to explain how these examples support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a clear structure for your essay. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, followed by supporting details and examples. An introduction, body paragraphs with distinct ideas, and a conclusion can enhance the logical flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
You should avoid repetitive structures and strive for variety in your sentence constructions to improve the readability and engagement of your essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online content
  • digital reading
  • free access
  • instant updates
  • electronic devices
  • printed materials
  • physical books
  • traditional media
  • reliable journalism
  • subscription fees
  • publishing industry
  • stable internet connection
  • screen fatigue
  • reading experience
  • focused study
  • decline in sales
  • remain in demand
  • a niche market
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