Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate about whether competing or cooperating is better for society. Some
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believe that competition
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workplace
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the workplace
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, at educational
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institutions
and in daily life is
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thing,
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others argue that members of the community should try to cooperate more
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.
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essay agrees with the
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opinion, as it encourages
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to learn from each other and leads to bigger contributions in
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world. Many
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think that competing against each other in different places
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as at school, at
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, and in daily life is something beneficial because it
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people
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to
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to their highest potential. They claim that
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need
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to
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to their highest
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ability
;
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, competition can be seen as
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something
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trigger
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to put
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hard efforts.
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,
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research in Norway showed that after posting the
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ranks among their classmates
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based
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school's
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the school's
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walls,
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students
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with lower grades
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significantly
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their grades.
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this
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people
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to
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harder,
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it puts high
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pressure
on
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and effect
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negatively
their mental health.
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, others believe that we need to cooperate
instead
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of competing with each other because it
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enables
us to learn
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each other experiences and helps us to contribute to bigger
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projects
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more easily.
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is because when
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work
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as one team they
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more ideas and solve more
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than if they
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individually.
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, a primary school
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team
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teamwork
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work
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in all
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the
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subject
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for one month, which led to a significant
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in
children
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children's
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ability to learn and their
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ethical
behaviours.
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,
cooperate
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have
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has
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more
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positive effect on society's behaviour and
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a huge project in
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a shorter
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time. In conclusion, despite that many think that competing against each other can
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individuals
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to
work
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hard and put in their best effort, I believe that cooperating with each other offers more advantages
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as learning from others and delivering huge
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in
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period.

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You presented both views on the topic well, which is required by the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your opinion nicely, approaching the end effectively.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
  • collective goals
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