some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled they say that the only way to increase recycling is for goverments to make it a legal requiremet.

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It is argued that governments should make recycling a legal part
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the law because some people think home trash
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not
recycleg
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recycled
recycling
enough.
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completly
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completely
agree
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that people need a recycling law.
Firstly
, rules are more easy to follow
secondly
, individuals will teach their
childrens
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about them
therefore
more waste will be recycled. When a regulation is made by an authority things tend to be more controlled. Because humans must do it or
otherwise
they will get a fine . Take
for example
the
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traffic
fines in Holland,
due to
that citizens became more
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careful
when they
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. Personally,
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believe nowadays humans
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became
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selfish, they do not care about the environment and they
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it is not a big deal but by putting
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they will forced to do it even if they
did
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not like it.
In addition
, kids usually imitate their parents and take them as a role model.
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adults are going to obey the laws, their children are going to copy them without thinking which it
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become
a habit
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them. A recent study showed that one of the simplest ways to
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your baby gain
a
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good behaviour is by doing it
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in front
of him, in
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your kid
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going to reduce the amount of unrecycled home waste. In conclusion, if recycling will be a legal
requirment
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requirement
people are intending to
obay
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obey
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it and their children too.
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