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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.
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The four five charts illustrate the results of surveys of the main reasons
teenagers
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use
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 their
phones
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 in Africa in the four years between 2016 and 2019.
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, it can be seen the significant main reasons
teenagers
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use
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 their
phones
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 for social networks.
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, the increasing number of
teenagers
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 using
phones
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 for social networks is increasing year by year yet in 2017
teenagers
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use
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phones
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 for social networks has fallen 2%. In 2016, 25% of
teenagers
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 used their
phones
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 for sending an email, but in the next three years, youngsters
use
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 their
phones
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 for sending an email has significantly fallen. the proportion of youngster wages steadily fell, from 25% in 2016 to only 19% in 2019. Looking more closely at the pie chart, the percentage of
teenagers
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 using their
phones
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 for a camera experience increased but not significantly,
as a result
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 in 2019, the percentage of youngsters using their
phones
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 for digital cameras reached 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words teenagers, use, phones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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