The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
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Doolittle University from 4 different parts of the world during a given period, starting from 1999.
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, it can be seen that the figure for the Far East and Africa increased over the given time. Linking Words
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in 2003, about 11000 of the total population applied. Linking Words
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Middle East applicants was 10000, and Correct article usage
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, in 2003, a peak at 20000 was reached. Linking Words
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went up in 2003 at approximately 6000 of the total population.Linking Words
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