The charts below shows the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts reveal how many
tourists
travelled overseas between 1985 to 1995 from Japan and what percentage
of them chose Australia
as their destination. They generally indicate that both the number
of tourists
and Australia
's share of them increased over the years.
As the bar chart represents
, the Verb problem
illustrates
number
of Japanese tourists
grew mildly within
each year, Change preposition
apply
started
from Wrong verb form
starting
the
vincinity of 4 Correct article usage
a
million
poeple
to approximately 10 Correct your spelling
people
million
ones
Correct pronoun usage
apply
untill
1990, with only a little decrease between 1990 and 1991. Correct your spelling
until
Then
, after a consistansy
between 1992 and 1993 at 12 Correct your spelling
consistent
million
people, it began to rise again untill
it reached nearly 14 Correct your spelling
until
million
tourists
at
1995.
In the line chart, it is obvious that the Change preposition
in
percentage
of Japanese tourists
in Australia
had a steady rise from 2 per cent
in 1985 to nearly 5 per cent
in 1988. Subsequently
, it had a fall to almost 4 per cent
in 1989, followed by a mild growth to around 6 per cent
in 1993. After that, it has a little decrease.
Overall
, the charts show that as the number
of tourists
from Japan grew throughout the years between 1985 and 1995, the percentage
of them coming to Australia
also
rose. They also
reveal that although
the number
of passengers and the percentage
of them in Australia
had little fluctuations, it was generally increasing.Submitted by mohamad.sanaye462 on
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