Nowadays many young people deliberately damage public places. What are the causes and solutions
It is certainly true that l, Nowadays some young
people
deliberately damage
public places
and, By now, This
event will be very popular in the world and I am going to give my opinion this
essay.
Nowadays, Some Change preposition
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people
damage
some places
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parents
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schools, streets, and ways, so , One scientist told them, We must to
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young
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However
, Other parents
only training their children
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places
and Some older need told
some Change the verb form
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young
people
and they don't
damage
some places
.
There are several reasons for this
problem, One of the major causes can be that, if some yong
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young
people
only damage
some places
and some police officers bring with them and Their parents
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police station and their parents
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children
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this
event and We must prevent this
problem. The third reason is that, If we don't
prevent this
event, some children
and young people
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some
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places
and I think, the various measures could be taken by governments and individuals to improve the situation.
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men
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