Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both views.
A portion of guardians are of the opinion that learning mathematics at school is unnecessary and should not be a part of the foundational curriculum of the students.
While
others still believe that it is a relevant skill even if Linking Words
they
might not be used in the future.
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for
most parents' view is meaninglessChange preposition
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,
because we have a lot of new technologies and programs designed to do mathematical solving for use. Like smartphones, calculators and computers which are readily available. Remove the comma
apply
Similarly
, it is a waste of time for scholars to learn Linking Words
such
a complicated field if they might not be using it in the future. They can just allocate their time and effort to other studies they are interested in.
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On the other hand
, some guardians are still of the view that mathematics is still useful for learners in their daily lives. Linking Words
For example
, if students go out shopping he/she needs to know the concept of money. With an item on sale, they need to know the principle of percentage and when paying with a card the interest that comes with it. So with Linking Words
this
, they will have a financial understanding and will attain financial awareness. Linking Words
Furthermore
, knowing the basics will give them a good idea and foundation on how the field of study works. With knowledge, they can troubleshoot basic program malfunctions if they arise in the future.
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To conclude
, Linking Words
although
the primary goal of most parents is to take out math because they think it is redundant. I am of the view that learning the Linking Words
basic
and the fundamentals of the subject is still an important part of our life.Fix the agreement mistake
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