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The diagram below shows the usual process a person must go through when applying for a driving license in one state in the US

The diagram below shows the usual process a person must go through when applying for a driving license in one state in the US
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The image provides information about the various stages in acquiring a driving
license
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 in a particular state in the US.
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, the driving application process includes seven steps if the
applicants
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 pass all the requirements with the initial finishing application in the
license
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 center and the eventual having
license
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. The first thing needed to get a driving
license
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 is to register in a center, and fill out the application. After that, there is an eyesight
test
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, if the
applicants
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 pass
this
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test
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, they will continue to the next step.
Then
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, they should spend money on fees,
applicants
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 will take a written
test
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 and if they fail, they can have two extra chances to retake the
test
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. Once the written
test
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 is passed, they can take a driving
test
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 and when they pass both exams they can get the driver's
license
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.
However
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, if
applicants
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 fail the road examination, they can still pay the fees again and do both tests.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words license, applicants, test with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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