The bestway to reduce youth crime is to educate parents about good parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Youth
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become more popular in
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generation. I believe, parenting
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are
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really good
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preventing
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crime
. I
partianlly
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agree with the statement and in the next paragraphs,
i
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will explain a few
reason
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and why.
Firstly
,
youngster
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first step
learning
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is from their
parents
.
Parent
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should educate their
child
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good
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example
for them.
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and knowledge to educate their
child
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.
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, at home parent should create good
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with their
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and
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what they thinking and
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to resolve
the
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problem
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. In
this
way,
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the child
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child
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can learn from
parents
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and behave like their
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.
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,
youth
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also
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from their
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, and from
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their
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watching.
Parent
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should
controls
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their
child
from using access
internets
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and
creat
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good
relationship
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with
your
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child
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friend. In
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you can guide and learn what their
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thinking.
Secondly
,
parents
should believe the school to
teaching
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childrents
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children
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person
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. At school, they not only
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subjective
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they
also
teaching
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your
childrents
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children
to
decipline
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discipline
. Teachers
also
should do a camping to reduce
youth
crime
.
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example
, invite a
motivation
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person to give a
speach
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speech
about
youth
crime
and the
consciouness
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consciousness
.
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also
can help
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the youngster
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to open their mindset. In
conclutions
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conclusion
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, both patenting and school education is
importance
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to
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to educate them.
Parents
should give good
example
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for
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thier
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their
kids. Having good parenting
skill
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also
improve
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parents
to educate
your
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child
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and
this
can reduce
youth
crime
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting education
  • behavioural strategies
  • family relationships
  • communication
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • peer pressure
  • societal issues
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • comprehensive community programs
  • law enforcement
  • legal consequences
  • deter
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