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Band 5

The bestway to reduce youth crime is to educate parents about good parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Youth
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crime
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skills
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skill
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are
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 really good
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to
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youngster
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a
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crime
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partianlly
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partly
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 should educate their
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 for them.
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 should have
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skill
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skills
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 and knowledge to educate their
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child
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children
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, at home parent should create good
relationship
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 with their
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learning
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example
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problem
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 way,
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the child
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child
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children
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 can learn from
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parents
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 and behave like their
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youth
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crime
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 not only
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come
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friend
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, and from
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their
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 watching.
Parent
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controls
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child
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internets
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creat
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create
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relationship
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child
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 friend. In
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child
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parents
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 should believe the school to
teaching
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your
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childrents
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children
 to become a better
person
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people
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subjective
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teaching
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childrents
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children
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decipline
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discipline
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crime
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motivation
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 person to give a
speach
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speech
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youth
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crime
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consciouness
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consciousness
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youngster
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the youngster
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 to open their mindset. In
conclutions
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conclusion
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youngster
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 to educate them.
Parents
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 should give good
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example
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for
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thier
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their
 kids. Having good parenting
skill
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skills
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also
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improve
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parents
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 to educate
your
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their
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child
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children
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 and
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 can reduce
youth
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crime
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Grammar & Vocabulary
Work on improving your grammar accuracy and range. Frequent grammatical errors and limited lexical resource detract from the clarity and impact of your ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance your essay structure by clearly dividing it into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point. Introduce each paragraph with a topic sentence that clearly links back to the overall argument.
Task Response
Support your arguments with more specific examples and explanations. This helps to strengthen your points and make your essay more persuasive.
Conclusion
Revise your conclusion to more effectively summarize your main points and restate your stance on the topic in a clear and persuasive manner.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting education
  • behavioural strategies
  • family relationships
  • communication
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • peer pressure
  • societal issues
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • comprehensive community programs
  • law enforcement
  • legal consequences
  • deter
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