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The map shows the change of a village called Chorleywood between 1868 and 1994

The map shows the change of a village called Chorleywood between 1868 and 1994
The map shows the change of a
village
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 called
Chorleywood
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 between 1868 and 1994.
It is clear that
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 the transport infrastructure in the
village
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 improved
while
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 the
village
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 grew. There are four periods of
developments
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development
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 shown on the map, and each of the populated areas is near
to
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the main roads, the motorway or the railway. From 1868 to 1883,
Chorleywood
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 covered a small area next to one of the main roads. The
Chorleywood
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 Park and Golf Course are now located next to the original
village
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 area. The
village
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 grew along the main road to the south
form
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from
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 1883 to 1922, and in 1909 a railway line was built across the area from west to east.
Chorleywood
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 station is located in
this
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 part of the
village
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. Meanwhile,
Chorleywood
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 continued to expand from
the
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east to west until 1970. At that time, a motorway was built to the east of the
village
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, and from 1970 to 1994,
further
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 expansion of the
village
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 happened around the motorway intersection with one of the main roads and the railway.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, chorleywood with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • recreational areas
  • conservation efforts
  • commercial areas
  • technological advancements
  • demographic shifts
  • preservation
  • historical buildings
  • evolution
  • residential areas
  • public services
  • economic changes
  • green spaces
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