To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Eating
insects
as a food
source is a solution for a country to increase the
population. Change the word
its
However
, many people believe that insects
are not only dangerous but growing them will also
making
a bad effect Verb problem
have
to
nature. I believe so many negative things Change preposition
on
of
eating Change preposition
about
insects
outweigh the positives. This
essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own viewpoint in the impending paragraph.
Insects
are one of the animal
Change to a plural noun
animals
who are growing
and Wrong verb form
that grow
living
in any place in the world Wrong verb form
live
such
as,
dark places, rubbish Remove the comma
apply
bin
and a surface of Fix the agreement mistake
bins
quite
places. Some Correct your spelling
quiet
country
use Fix the agreement mistake
countries
of
edible Change preposition
apply
insects
as a
Remove the article
food
a portion of food
food
including indonesia
. But, others said that, could not consume that Change the capitalization
Indonesia
due to
insects
an
Correct article usage
apply
animal
Fix the agreement mistake
animals
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
are
living wild outside without knowing how they Change the verb form
is
life
. Replace the word
live
Furthermore
, there is a religion which ban
to Change the verb form
bans
serve
of edible Replace the word
serving
insects
as a dish.
Some of them thinks
, there are some advantages of consuming Change the verb form
think
insects
, such
as contains
lots of vitamins and Correct subject-verb agreement
contain
easy
to harvestAdd a missing verb
are easy
it
, especially, in some Correct pronoun usage
apply
country
which do not have a sea to catch the fish and do not have a wide land to harvest a vegetable. Harvesting Fix the agreement mistake
countries
insects
are
the best idea to use Correct subject-verb agreement
is
it
in our daily Correct pronoun usage
apply
food
.
However
, the drawbacks are still many outweigh the benefits. For instance
, we know that lots of vitamin
inside them, Fix the agreement mistake
vitamins
while
, we do not know where is the source of insects
. Might be it comes from either garbage or dirty
place. Correct article usage
a dirty
Additionally
, it will make
some other Verb problem
cause
disease
in the future. Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
Hence
, the right way is avoiding
Change the verb form
to avoid
the
Correct article usage
apply
insects
as a dish. Chicken is a great food
to eat due to
many
proteins, Correct pronoun usage
its many
vitamins
and easy to getCorrect word choice
and vitamins
it
.
In conclusion, eating Correct pronoun usage
apply
insects
is not a great solution for supporting the population of society, due to
the problems we will face ahead. A better option is to choose other animals to eat that provide many benefits to our daily lifeSubmitted by Dedeways244 on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear structure, with separate paragraphs for introduction, benefits, drawbacks, and conclusion. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that clearly states the main idea of the paragraph.
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Develop your main points by explaining and supporting them with examples or evidence. Avoid making broad statements without backing them up.
task achievement
Pay attention to the task instructions. Make sure to address all parts of the question, including both the benefits and drawbacks of the issue, and provide a balanced view before stating your own opinion.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.