the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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The line graph illustrates how many travellers
were
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visited
in
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a particular Caribbean
island
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from 2010
till
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to
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2017.
Overall
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, the total number of
visitors
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experienced
tha
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the
fastest growth by the end of the period, there were more tourists than the other two places combined.
On the other hand
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, the number of
visitors
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which
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who
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stayed on
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island
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the island
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and
a
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apply
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cruise ships
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
throughout the period. At the
begining
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beginning
of the period the number of travellers
which
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who
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stayedon
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stayed on
stayed
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island
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the island
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reached a low
approximately
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of approximately
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0.3
millions
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million
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. It continued to grow
untill
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until
2011 when it peaked at 0.5
millions
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million
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of
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visitors
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, before falling into decline in 2012.
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However
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it started growing gradually from 2012 till 2017 and peaked at exactly 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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sightseers. Its place as
a leading tourists
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a leading tourist
leading tourists
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were taken by
visitors
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styaing
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staying
on cruise ships which demonstrated a strong upward trend between 2012 and 2017. With regard to the remaining
visitors
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stayed
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staying
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on
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island
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the island
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increased slowly by 2013
wiyth
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with
1.5
millons
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million
of
visitors
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and stayed at the same level by 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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