You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In the
comtemporary
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contemporary
market, there is no doubt that advertisement
is playing
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a
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essential role in incentive
the
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consumption. Regarding
this
, some perceived that result in our purchase for unuseful
commidities
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commodities
communities
. Whilst others contend that it is
due to
advertising we have
acceses
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access
to
better
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a better
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quality
product
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products
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that elevate our living
standar
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standard
standards
. In my perspective, as
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a customer
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customer
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customers
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, we should
dispose
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the capability to distinguish the
feability
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feasibility
viability
of information and benefit from that. On the one hand, the advertisement can be seen
in
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anywhere, including
subway
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the subway
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,
elevator
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elevators
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, o even
toilet
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, all of them are persuading you
in purchasing
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to purchase
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something, as a
reasult
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result
, customers fall into
consumlism
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consumers
and
storage
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an array of products that will be never utilized, which, obviously lead to
bad
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circle of
requierment
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requirement
and supply causing increasing burden to the earth,
However
, with daily elevated awareness of environmental protection and saving resources, individuals tend to adapt to living in breve, avoiding the flushing of desire, as can be seen, advertisement swifts into a convenient instrument to help people how to pick up products.
In addition
, some advertising
mode
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modes
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like Demo in terms of electronic
equippmet
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equipment
or
vehicle
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vehicles
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can dramatically help people understand both
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of what they want to own and decide
in
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whether will buy. It
also
encourage
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individuals to buy what is right
instead
of wrong. In conclusion, we live in a century
fullfilled
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fulfilled
with vast
informations
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information
pieces of information
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, no matter
it
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whether it
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will suitable to reality or not, we are
influented
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influenced
by them
inevitablely
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inevitably
inevitable
. What should we
to
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do, in my
views
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, is
insisting
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on
preserve
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a wise mind in front of all
kind
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of allure from dizzying promotion。
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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