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The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012

The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012
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The charts depicted the exports of
coffee
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 from various countries, namely
Brazil
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, Colombia, and
Costa
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Rica
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.
While
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 there are heterogeneous variety in the movement of each line chart, the
overall
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 trend indicates that the exports of
coffee
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 significantly increased from 2002 up to 2012.
Brazil
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 started as the second-most
coffee
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exporters
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 in 2002, right behind
Costa
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Rica
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. Over the years,
Brazil
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 saw a consistent improvement in the export numbers and only experienced a downward movement
in
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 2008 to 2010. The continuous improvement put them in first place by the end of the period, higher than Colombia and
Costa
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Rica
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.
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,
Costa
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Rica
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 saw a drastic drop in the amount of exports in the early period of 2002-2006.
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Costa
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Rica
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 rebounded in 2008 and after, it could not compete with that
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Brazil
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due to
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 the intense reduction during the early period. Colombia started as the country with the least amount of
coffee
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 exported in 2002. Previously, the number rose to above 10 million KG of
coffee
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 in 2006 before dropping to an all-time low of slightly below 5 million KG.
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, they managed to pick up the pace and recover, reaching 15 million KG in 2012 despite being significantly less than the other countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, costa, rica with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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