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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information on the
achieved
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three different types of
medals
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 across ten different countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games event by god. It is clearly seen that the United States placed the first rank, since they
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 the highest achievers in all three types of
medals
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, predominantly in the
gold
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 ones. Meanwhile, the reverse was true for Australia, even though they achieved a moderate number of
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, accumulatively. In the 2012 Olympic Games, the United States ranked first since they successfully gained by far 46
gold
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, 26 silver, and 29 bronze, which
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 drove them to
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 the most
olympic
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Olympic
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medals
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 with
total
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 of 104. Following on the second rank was China, which obtained 38
gold
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 and 88
medals
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 in sum. Interestingly, Great Britain successfully
occuppied
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occupied
 the third rank with 29
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, even though the accumulation from all types of
medals
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 was less than Russia. A similar trend
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 occurred between Germany and France, with only two
gold
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discrepancy
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 from each other.
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, even though Australia achieved 35
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 in total, they gained the minimum proportion of
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, compared to Italy and Hungary, which equally won eight
gold
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, gold with synonyms.
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