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The bar chart illustrates the amount of hours that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists used per day to do 3 activities

The bar chart illustrates the amount of hours that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists used per day to do 3 activities
The image compares the total
time
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tourists
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 spend from 4 different countries on three different activities, including visiting
places
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, reading books, and at the beach. In general,
tourists
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 from 4 different countries spent most of their
time
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 at the beach or reading books. Visiting
places
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 is the minor
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 thing among these
tourists
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. During the holidays, Chinese and American
tourists
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 spent most of their leisure
time
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 reading books, accounting for 8 and 5
hours
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
tourists
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 from Turkey and Brazil spent their holiday mainly at the beach, accounting for 6
hours
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 and 5
hours
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 respectively. All
tourists
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 from 4 different countries spent the least of their leisure
time
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 visiting
places
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 with only 3
hours
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 or less. In more detail, Turkish and American
tourists
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 spent 3
hours
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 on average for
this
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 activity.
Furthermore
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,
tourists
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 from Brazil spend 2
hours
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 visiting
places
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, meaning
tourists
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 from China only allocate an hour for
this
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 particular activity.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, tourists, places, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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